Waiting at Crossroads ([info]guede_mazaka) wrote,
@ 2004-05-28 15:56:00
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Current mood: energetic
Current music:that "is there anyone out there?" song
Entry tags:fic, india, kill bill, mexico-ouatim, troy

Guess where the title's from
Bonus points if you get the reference.

I gave in to the urge and wrote fic bits at work, then emailed them to myself. Can you tell I really needed it to be Friday?

ETA: Oh. My. God. Young Michael Caine was dishy. Still sounds like a geezer, but damn, the profile.

Title: Nine Days on the Tree
Author: Guede Mazaka
Rating: PG-13
Pairing: Gen, The Bride/O-ren Ishii, Achilles/Hector
Feedback: Good lines, bad ones, etc.
Disclaimer: Not mine.
Fandom: Once Upon a Time in Mexico, Kill Bill, Troy
Notes: Previous parts to the Kill Bill section are here.
Summary: Three sets of three. For the [info]contrelamontre ‘hide, orange, burn’ challenge; done in about 1 hour twenty-four minutes.


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The world's hidden itself away. That was what a little bird told Sands, the third time he woke up. The first time, it'd said that it was still nighttime.

Bullshit. All of it. The world's still there, glorious and raunchy and cheap as the crumpled bills in the gutter, but it's gone and tossed Sands out. As if he weren't good enough for it. As if he'd failed it, when in reality he's been one of its best players yet. Is one of its best players. He speaks its patter, he walks its saunter, and he fingers its sharp bones.

It's hiding from him. Well, that wasn't going to save it.

* * *

Orange was the first color he lost.

It used to be flat citrus soda in dented bottles, faded posters shredding off the walls, lurid fluorescence in the rentable shitholes of the world. He didn't notice it much, too distracted by its prettier friend green. But orange was the warning hue--red was the one that said too far, too fast, too late—and it wasn't any surprise that Sands had missed its passing.

Then again...he feels the pebbled skin of the round fruit giving under his pressing thumb, the juice spraying vibrant scent into the air. He sticks his head out the window and feels the sun burn right into his head. And as his neurons blister-explode, like so many kernels of popcorn, he thinks that maybe colors can't be lost. They just...change.

* * *

His hands are sticky, though he's not quite sure what layer's on top: blood, orange squirt, or just plain mud. There are tear tracks on his cheeks because the ducts don't really work right, and he knows this because he can hear the confused pity. No one's brave enough to risk the good Samaritan act, though. Not in Mexico.

The country's crawling out to meet him, slow because it's hard to go forth on hands and knees. It's sniffing along the trail he's flung far and wide behind him, tracking down its own. The peso-hungry whore's stained him, down where the sun don't reach, and Sands laughs at that.

Because he's finally found his balance, among the well-dressed mongrels and the crippled myths. Nothing's quite as it should be here, and that includes him.

~*~

O-ren hates the Bride.

She does so with the patient detachment that she's always striven to maintain. She hates the Bride for what the woman has done to the yakuza empire O-ren had worked so long, so hard to conquer. A dream of revenge, suddenly broken into little bloody flakes, and by what? Another vision of vengeance. O-ren wants to know why the Bride's hatred should be stronger than O-ren's; after all, B is a new one to this particular game.

But O-ren has hidden that part of herself very well, and she refuses to ever look at it. She's not afraid of looking upon its brutal ugliness--she's afraid of looking and not seeing anything.

* * *

South America's a land of browns and yellows. Its overall color is green--jungles and heat and wildness--but its earth is orange mud. Fetid, rotting, and yet capable of supporting vast amounts of growth.

They're driving down one of its roads, ochre splashing up against the windshield like liquefied flesh, when the Bride tells O-ren the name of her daughter.

And fool that she is, O-ren wonders aloud, and Beatrix answers her. Not the Bride. Beatrix.

It's harder to wish Beatrix dead and O-ren free of this strange bondage than it was to wish the Bride dead.

* * *

The girl is playing outside, watching cartoons on the bed while her mother cries and laughs on the bathroom floor and O-ren sits on the toilet, still waiting for a chance that never came.

She'd taken the Bride's side partly because the wom--Beatrix--was the strongest. Partly because O-ren found herself unable to do otherwise. But she'd hoped that Bill's death would end everything. That had been what had kept her sane.

But Bill is buried in the backyard of a small town's biggest hacienda, Beatrix is staring at her hands, and O-ren is still lacking peace.

“They're so dirty...” murmurs the other woman.

O-ren remembers all her lessons. She thinks of Macbeth, and thinks of Iphigenia and Clytemnestra, and thinks of her own hands. Then she slides off the toilet, and closes her eyes while Beatrix traces their soul stains.

~*~

The Underworld is gloomy and dank, with spirits dismally gusting about on the prevailing wind. It's the place of waiting, the place of judgment.

Perhaps that second quality is why Achilles still retains some memory of life. He cannot let himself wander aimlessly as the others do; he takes no comfort in the melancholy tale-telling, or even the dubious lightness that bathes the Elysian fields. Instead, he walks the riverbank, wishing for some monster to rise up and offer him a fight. For a way to break out of this eternal tedium.

And then he meets with the shades of his father, of Patroclus. And he cries out after them, comes forward to greet them with all the fervor of a weary soul finally returning home.

And they smile, but listlessly. Embrace him, welcome him--but these are not the men he loved. These are ghosts.

Achilles slips away from them, ducks beneath a sighing willow, and only then ceases to hide his grief.

* * *

Bronze is the color of war, and red is the color of death. When blood splashes across a shield, it is the exact shade of the vivid orange trickling down the center of Hector's chest. “As you can see, I still wear your mark.”

Achilles never learned to apologize; he gropes toward it on occasion, but his gifts aren't those of silver-tongued Odysseus. So he doesn't bother. Simply reaches out cupped hands and catches the bright drops within their hollows. “Why is it that we of all of them cannot rest?”

“Our tolls were paid, our honor kept or restored...but it was never our war.” Hector shrugs. “Our battle, but not our war...until we stole it. There's a leap after that, but my wits will not follow it. Nor do I want them to.”

And his gaze bends as his knees do, and while Achilles watches in shock, the other man sips from the bowl of hands.

* * *

Their skin has dried somewhat, but in the desert of the Underworld, it still feels as if Achilles has been drenched in a thunderous downpour. He's a little surprised when he discovers himself slightly smaller than Hector, and even more so when he finds the taste of the man to his liking.

“Dead and still golden.” Hector strokes a finger along Achilles' leg, ending with a slight press on the scarred ankle.

“I treated your corpse like...” Shame and guilt: lessons Achilles learned too late, in too wrong a way. Only now does he have the sight for truth.

A hiss, a flash in dark eyes, and a kiss. “In this place, you have the only other spark of life that I've come across. I think I could forgive anything for that.”

“Stain of life,” Achilles corrects. They don't belong here. Hector should still be in a thriving Troy, and Achilles...wonders if he'd ever belonged anywhere. But this circle of tangled limbs is good enough, and he soon gives up to the rest it holds.



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[info]dreamiflame
2004-05-28 01:08 pm UTC (link)
Norse mythology, also Neil Gaiman's American Gods. Refers to the amount of time Odin hung on the tree, a sacrifice of himself to himself for knowledge.

Er, I'd read the fic, but I've not yet seen the movie. Just wanted to be a knowitall. *hides*

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[info]guede_mazaka
2004-05-28 01:14 pm UTC (link)
*hands you a musebunny*

Yup. Congrats to you:) Which movie were you referring to? It's not a crossover; the first cut's 'Mexico,' the second is 'Kill Bill,' etc.

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[info]dreamiflame
2004-05-28 02:23 pm UTC (link)
Kill Bill. Sorry, I just scanned real quick and only saw that, but I went back and read it, and it's good. Different, but good. I liked the Troy bit better than the movie.

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[info]guede_mazaka
2004-05-28 02:41 pm UTC (link)
Thanks. 'Troy' the movie was a little disappointing, but it left so many possibilities for fanfic.

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[info]megpie71
2004-05-28 06:46 pm UTC (link)
The tree in question being Yggdrasil, the world-oak. I understand he also hung upside down, although that may be me getting Tad Williams all tangled in with things.

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[info]guede_mazaka
2004-05-28 06:49 pm UTC (link)
No, the upside down part's right, I believe. It was incorporated into the Tarot as 'The Hanging Man.'

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[info]hannahrorlove
2004-05-28 03:10 pm UTC (link)
American Gods. A quick google search proves Gaiman got it from Norse mythology.

Sands forgetting colors is heartbreaking on so many levels. Losing memories, losing ties to the past, losing ties to what's around him.
I love the phrase "crippled myths."

I like the revelation of names in the "Kill Bill" section, especially how it creates humanity.
The Iphigenia and Clytemnestra is a good segue, by the way.

I haven't seen Troy (and I doubt I will) but you've got some nice turns of phrase in the pieces.

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[info]guede_mazaka
2004-05-28 03:29 pm UTC (link)
I see I should get around to reading that book, too.

Thanks. The cool thing about 'Kill Bill' is how the Bride manages to be a humanly psychotic vengeance freak, due to some fine acting by Thurman. And there's something rather Greek about its tragic elements.

Well, for 'Troy' I'm probably drawing as much off the canon as off the movie; I disagreed with a lot of what they changed/cut out.

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[info]lassiterfics
2004-05-28 08:58 pm UTC (link)
“In this place, you have the only other spark of life that I've come across. I think I could forgive anything for that.”
Read the Hector/Achilles one, to which I say: awesome. Way to capitalize on the "We shall meet again, my brother" line.

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[info]guede_mazaka
2004-05-29 05:54 am UTC (link)
Thanks! Considering how alike those two are, it was a shame they didn't get to interact more before dying.

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[info]lassiterfics
2004-05-29 09:41 am UTC (link)
I was totally thinking the same thing.

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[info]redorchard
2004-05-28 10:05 pm UTC (link)
He speaks its patter, he walks its saunter, and he fingers its sharp bones.
It's hiding from him. Well, that wasn't going to save it.


:::chills down spine::::

that was fantastic.

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[info]guede_mazaka
2004-05-29 05:57 am UTC (link)
Thanks!

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[info]madam_h
2004-05-29 01:05 am UTC (link)
I know I haven't commented for an age, but I am reading and I had to crawl out of my little woodworky hole to say that something about the line...

The country's crawling out to meet him

... simply shakes my heart around.

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[info]guede_mazaka
2004-05-29 06:11 am UTC (link)
*glomps you*

Hey! And much thanks. That line comes from a story about this ancient Chinese warlord named Hsiang Yu, who was so terrifying that when all the other kings went to surrender, they came out on their knees and scooted to him.

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[info]pinkdormouse
2004-05-29 04:20 am UTC (link)
Loved all three of the triplets.

I was having thoughts yesterday about Sands and the memory of colours. Not sure whether that will end up in current fic, or as something else in its own right. In that vein, I particularly liked He didn't notice it much, too distracted by its prettier friend green.

And the third '...Mexico' drabble blows me away.

Gina

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[info]guede_mazaka
2004-05-29 06:19 am UTC (link)
Thanks.

The color idea actually comes a little from a fic-in-progress by [info]tacks that I saw; I think she's still working on it, but you might wanna hang around and prod a little. 'cause it was awesome. Mostly, the idea's from the concept of synesthesia, which has always fascinated me.

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[info]pinkdormouse
2004-05-29 07:37 am UTC (link)
Should find out more about synesthesia, considering some of the folks on my F-list.

Shall drop a quick hint to [info]tacks, altho' it looks like she may have a lot of other stuff to deal with at the moment.

Gina

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[info]thesilversiren
2004-05-31 07:08 pm UTC (link)
I am constantly in awe of your writing... with this especially. All three were marvelous, and the Troy one killed me to the point where I just stare at it slack-jawed.

All of it's beautiful... especially Hector's comment about Achilles having the only other spark of life that he'd come across. Or his reasoning for why they cannot rest. *happy sigh*

And O-Ren and B? Loved how simply you made the distinction between the Bride and Beatrix. :)

Because he's finally found his balance, among the well-dressed mongrels and the crippled myths. Nothing's quite as it should be here, and that includes him.

And that? Chills up my spine. It just rang so true for Sands.

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[info]guede_mazaka
2004-06-01 04:49 pm UTC (link)
Thanks!

'Stain' could go with so many fandoms, so I just had to do multiple responses. The 'Troy' one I was hoping would turn out okay, as I've forgotten a lot of the classical Greek stuff I've learned. As for O-ren and B? It was interesting, thinking of how O-ren would react to B's daughter, considering her background and all.

Sands just comes like a dream now. I've written him so much that sometimes, I feel like I could almost wear him.

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[info]sands_eyes
2004-06-01 06:31 pm UTC (link)
Guede, wear Sands.....Hmmmmmm, now that's a real nice dream....
"Because he;s finally found his balance"...don't know why, that line just stuck with me.....

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[info]guede_mazaka
2004-06-01 06:39 pm UTC (link)
Of course, if Sands were clothing, then he'd be the last suit you'd ever wear:)

I liked that line too. It's just a gut thing.

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[info]fetishesque
2004-06-03 05:23 pm UTC (link)
He speaks its patter, he walks its saunter, and he fingers its sharp bones.

It's hiding from him. Well, that wasn't going to save it.


The language.. it's as if you whispered it out of Sands' mind and into your own. 'Fingers its sharp bones' - I can picture it, him leaning back against something, a wall perhaps, running those fingers over and over them with that look on his face like he can see them, and pricking his finger, and El taking them and using them for guitar picks. Well, not the world's bones per se, but you get the idea.

Loved it all. Why does everything flow together that well, even when crossing fandoms? *furious pondering*

Thankyou for this.

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[info]guede_mazaka
2004-06-03 05:36 pm UTC (link)
and El taking them and using them for guitar picks. Well, not the world's bones per se, but you get the idea.

Oh, do I get it. You've got the makings of an excellent drabble right there.

Also, thank you v. much. I've been writing in the 'Mexico' fandom since October, and it's good to know that I've still got a good grip on Mr. Sheldon J. Sands.

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[info]fetishesque
2004-06-03 06:11 pm UTC (link)
Have wasted fifteen minutes of I-really-should-have-been-doing-something-else creating this:

It wasn’t the edges of brick biting into his back or the low, thrumming whine of the rusted-together cars as they kicked up dust in his face – fuck, everyone seemed to be doing that lately – that made him turn down the corners of his mouth, slightly, but enough for the breath beside him to catch before resuming its heartbeat. It was only the whisper-thin ivory sliver of bone that had wedged its way in between his thumb and his forefinger, below the ‘3.’ Sands could still tell where the tattoo was, not from habit of glancing at it while he put pen to paper, but because he sometimes ran his finger over it tentatively, and could feel it. He liked to think that he could still feel darkness.
The sliver-splinter, protesting sharply at its separation from the shock of slim bone that Sands fingered gently between the pads of his fingers and his palms, crushed itself inward nearly to powder as Sands’ teeth fell down upon it, probing.
Pare,” the leathered voice came, scorning, and bit the corner of his lip, glaring as functionally as he could with his mouth. “Fucker,” he breathed. “Escuche,” the voice said, again, and Sands tilted his head backwards as the remainder of the bone slid from his hand and into the other’s. Next came notes – not really a melody, yet – lilting and disjointed, but Sands heard it above the cluttered noise of the streets. He winced, but it was really more of a smile.

Ehh, hope 'twas what you were thinking of. Maybe I'll post it later, maybe not - like I said, done in fifteen minutes, so 's still rough and whatnot. Had fun writing it, though, but must get back to more persistently demanding things. *scurries*

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[info]guede_mazaka
2004-06-03 06:18 pm UTC (link)
That was absolutely beautiful. Awesome imagery, and a fascinating give-take-merge vibe between Sands and El. The only thing I'd suggest is putting a space in between each paragraph, so it's easier to read.

He liked to think that he could still feel darkness.

That's perfect Sands.

the leathered voice came, scorning

And that's excellent El.

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[info]fetishesque
2004-06-04 04:13 am UTC (link)
Thank you! And coming from someone who really knows perfect Sands and excellent El (inside and out, upside down and sideways), that means a lot.

Took your advice and put spaces between the paragraphs - God, I must have been more than half asleep when I wrote this. Thanks again.

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[info]ficangel
2004-06-05 05:06 pm UTC (link)
Achilles/Hector=teh lusty. Yum.

I'd never considered O-Ren/Bride before, outside of generic violent enemy fucking. Good job making it real.

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[info]guede_mazaka
2004-06-05 05:15 pm UTC (link)
Thanks. I know about the Achilles/Patroclus, but somehow, that pairing doesn't interest me. Though I've got to work in Odysseus somewhere.

You like O-ren/Bride, wait till you see what I do with Elle/Bride. It's like Sanzelle, only with swords:P

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[info]ficangel
2004-06-05 05:48 pm UTC (link)
There is a spooky parallel between them, isn't there? Right down to the lack of eyes.

Though, for some reason, I don't see El as hooking Sands' eyes out and leaving him there. Like he was too much of a finger on the pulse point of honor and how it works. He goes after an enemy, he pays them the bizarre respect of killing rather than maiming.

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[info]guede_mazaka
2004-06-05 05:52 pm UTC (link)
I agree with you about El. What I meant was the possible post-movie vibes in between them, only it would be notched up a level since Elle can legitimately blame the Bride for her problems.

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::mad applause::
[info]permetaform
2004-06-07 10:47 pm UTC (link)
ooooo, you weave the stories into change, like gateways like movement, "stains of life" indeed ::glomps::

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Re: ::mad applause::
[info]guede_mazaka
2004-06-08 04:27 am UTC (link)
It's like building up a painting from inside-out, almost. I'm really loving this kind of writing.

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Re: ::mad applause::
[info]permetaform
2004-06-08 09:08 pm UTC (link)
heh, and we alllll reap the benefits...

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Re: ::mad applause::
[info]guede_mazaka
2004-06-09 04:31 am UTC (link)
Reaping the fruits of the delirium in my head.

Have decided to go eight parts with this--for some reason, I'm associating eight with fractal. Can't remember my math all of a sudden...

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(Anonymous)
2004-06-13 12:45 pm UTC (link)
Read the Troy one.

“In this place, you have the only other spark of life that I've come across. I think I could forgive anything for that.”
Best line in the fic. Absolutely loved it. :)

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[info]guede_mazaka
2004-06-13 03:24 pm UTC (link)
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed.

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